Amander123 Posted April 29, 2011 Share Posted April 29, 2011 Warning: this poem is for 18+ I hope you enjoy "Lust" His heavy breathing Was turning me on I wanted him to fuck me Until the break of dawn My body was sweaty I was fully erect I needed him to mount me If he did not object One finger went in And then two fingers next He streched me out good Before anal-sex My body was aching For him to go in I wanted the pleasure And heat of his skin He entered at last And I let out a groan He then grabbed my penis As I started to moan With a nibble on my ear His hips began to thrust This was not true love It was only pure lust Faster he went As he pulled on my hair This pleasure was mutual An ecstacy we shared He continued to fuck me Until I came on the sheet And he erupted inside me A feeling so sweet He put on his clothes And walked out the door He left me alone As I cried on the floor 21 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
K Posted April 29, 2011 Share Posted April 29, 2011 . .amander-sama, your poem was just right to be rated 18+, hahaha, lol . .it's so revealing, i guess there's nothing much to say, it already expresses the feelings from the formation of words, itself . .you did another great work, amander-sama :leaf12: 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JenovaVII Posted April 29, 2011 Share Posted April 29, 2011 I enjoyed it very much. Explicit and straight forward, nothing left to hide. It was fast paced but it felt right. It was thoroughly well and clearly written, and you were perfectly able to expose the passionate scene, that was really good. Crude and shameless without nastiness or kinkiness. Just honest want and craving. Also loved the ending, I prefer angst to happy ever after :msn_red_fox 9 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
misakixusagi Posted April 29, 2011 Share Posted April 29, 2011 o_o wow that is a awsome poem!! felt like i was reading a manga, you used descript words lol luv it 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Macys Posted April 29, 2011 Share Posted April 29, 2011 Cool Amander! Awesome poem! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Karin Posted April 29, 2011 Share Posted April 29, 2011 Oh Amanda your poem is so hot!!!! :7yoyo10: 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amander123 Posted April 29, 2011 Author Share Posted April 29, 2011 Thanks everyone!! It's not as good as what I can normally write but I wrote late at night and I was tired so that's probably why lol I'm glad you still liked it anyways Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YAO(H)I_lover Posted May 4, 2011 Share Posted May 4, 2011 You did a really great job!:7yoyo10: 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amander123 Posted May 5, 2011 Author Share Posted May 5, 2011 Thank you so much YAO(H)I_lover!! I'm glad everyone likes it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aki Posted May 6, 2011 Share Posted May 6, 2011 Amander your poem is so hot! I like it a lot! hahaha it was so hot that you needed spoilers :leaf5: 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amander123 Posted May 11, 2011 Author Share Posted May 11, 2011 Amander your poem is so hot! I like it a lot! hahaha it was so hot that you needed spoilers :leaf5: Hahahahahaha you're right lol. I didn't think of it that way Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ueda_Angel Posted May 16, 2011 Share Posted May 16, 2011 Lemon in Poetry form not common but not rare found it rather interesting. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest alexander Posted May 17, 2011 Share Posted May 17, 2011 :o t_t wrong smiles lol ! i meant T_T Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Harukei Posted May 18, 2011 Share Posted May 18, 2011 *nosebleeds* Really, I loved it so much~ I have to share this >// 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TricksXia Posted May 19, 2011 Share Posted May 19, 2011 Wow! I love this poem. Thanks for posting it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rikimaru Posted January 21, 2013 Share Posted January 21, 2013 A+ You Win! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YaoiPikachu Posted October 18, 2013 Share Posted October 18, 2013 Well I just got a girl erection :7yoyo10::2yoyo6: That was awesome writing! Very descriptive! rabbit14 - - - Updated - - - Well I just got a girl erection :7yoyo10::2yoyo6: That was awesome writing! Very descriptive! rabbit14 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ukemextreme Posted December 30, 2013 Share Posted December 30, 2013 woah. like seriously, woah. great job for a very steamy poem.:leaf12: i still feel bad for the speaker though ;n; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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