misakixusagi Posted May 18, 2011 Share Posted May 18, 2011 took me few days to work this one out but finished it in the end lol let me know what you think guys.... I can see the crimson horizon between the ocean and the sky The lights are fading, day is closing and stars are looking high. I lie back on the sand and place my hands above my head The world is changing before my eyes, everything is turning red. I start to dream about a world where war is good and truth is bad The roads are long and harsh, the worst experience I've had. I run to the edge of the earth waiting for it all to break I fall deeper into the dream, which path do I have to take. I breathe and keep believing that it will all be over soon I’m waiting to hear those waves being moved forward by the moon. I slowly open my eyes to see the shining silver rays I smile as you are next to me to see your love that pays. 12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JenovaVII Posted May 18, 2011 Share Posted May 18, 2011 A very realistic reflection on the world happenings, in general. Short and simple, full of insight and truth. Yours word deliver a melancholic bittersweetness that goes very well with the idea being transmitted. My favorite part is: I run to the edge of the earth waiting for it all to break It gives a sense of closure. And yet again it does not. Hinting of the end and the rebirth of a cycle. Beautiful. (: 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YLover Posted May 18, 2011 Share Posted May 18, 2011 Very cuuute!!! You express your ideas in such a beautiful way! I love it! :hamtaro-005 (8): This is my favorite part: "I breathe and keep believing that it will all be over soon I’m waiting to hear those waves being moved forward by the moon." 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
misakixusagi Posted May 18, 2011 Author Share Posted May 18, 2011 awsome guys glad u liked it * blush* ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hinata--chan Posted November 25, 2011 Share Posted November 25, 2011 Beautiful gave me chills. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tasteofink Posted December 24, 2011 Share Posted December 24, 2011 I feel the dark clammy touch of it It haunts me in my dreams It makes me cry and wonder why I suffer as I do. I wonder when it will go away When the pain will subside But in my false reality My mind and soul slowly die My tears stain my cheeks as they slide down my face It hurt so long.....so long I've keep those tears deep inside The relief is bitterly sweet My head is pounding My head is swimming My eyes grow red and sore I can feel my heart at it's last I can feel fear no more My body is slowly going numb The pain is almost gone I close my eyes and prepare myself for my mind is at it's last My throat goes dry as sand My skin is freezing cold But I lie awake Eyes as wide as ever But my mind is no more............... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tasteofink Posted December 24, 2011 Share Posted December 24, 2011 I wrote this two months ago when my dad died......... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
misakixusagi Posted December 24, 2011 Author Share Posted December 24, 2011 You should set up a new post for ure poem so people can see it instead of posting under mine , but I enjoyed reading it, well done x n im sorry for your loss Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tasteofink Posted December 24, 2011 Share Posted December 24, 2011 I apologize for that but I post what I'm reminded of.......do you get what I mean..? thanks n.n I'll make a new post n.n Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
misakixusagi Posted December 24, 2011 Author Share Posted December 24, 2011 No worrys x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tasteofink Posted December 24, 2011 Share Posted December 24, 2011 I posted a new thread!!!!it's a different poem tho.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YAO(H)I_lover Posted December 25, 2011 Share Posted December 25, 2011 Truly amazing! I have no words... I could clearly see all of it in my head as I read it *__* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kasuku Posted December 25, 2011 Share Posted December 25, 2011 Its Awesome.....How I wish I can write good poem as well....XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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