TricksXia Posted May 19, 2011 Share Posted May 19, 2011 My very first poem.leaf3 I'm still a newbie at making them but oh well here it goes. I've always been like this, Waiting at ease, But the truth is I've been falling into the deepest abyss. I couldn't even imagine That you would come, And rescue me from this hatred that I'm feeling. For you, it's just a fling, But I will hold onto this precious sensation, darling. For it is the only thing I have to continue on living. I hope you'll point my mistakes. Hope you enjoyed reading it.:leaf3: 9 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
K Posted May 19, 2011 Share Posted May 19, 2011 . .simple but meaningful, . there's a sense at every word, and you were able to give emphasis to important words that carries the feeling Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aoi Posted May 20, 2011 Share Posted May 20, 2011 Very beautiful and romantic! I like it a lot! :msn_red_fox 15 PS: I wouldn't say that this is your first poem! Very very well done! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TricksXia Posted May 20, 2011 Author Share Posted May 20, 2011 O.O Wow! Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Miro Posted May 20, 2011 Share Posted May 20, 2011 I also like it a lot! Very good job TricksXia! :5yoyo34: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amander123 Posted May 20, 2011 Share Posted May 20, 2011 Aww its beautiful I think you did great for your first poem! In fact, I would never have guessed that it was only you first Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TricksXia Posted May 21, 2011 Author Share Posted May 21, 2011 O.O Oh my...thank you for these wonderful comments! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
현애 Posted May 21, 2011 Share Posted May 21, 2011 it so sweet.:cuteonion41::cuteonion41: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TricksXia Posted May 21, 2011 Author Share Posted May 21, 2011 Sankyuu :leaf3: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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