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A night of passion


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Skin against skin

Your breath against my ear

The friction between bodies - maddening

We are getting lost in the rhythm

 

Teeth against skin

I bite your beautiful neck

Your pain and your blood - intoxicating

We are devoted to carnival lust

 

Lips against lips

Your whole body is shivering

Your scream and moans - the sweetest

We never wanted it to end

 

 

 

 

 

I don't know where it came from, but it just did. So yeah. Be kind.

 

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The composition of the piece is very nice; I like the wording you used. It's short but it's revealing, nonetheless, so it doesn't loose its charm. The parts above are my favorite sentences. ♥

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Thank you for your critique, Jenow, it's nice to know what I did right and what I could do better :)

 

Perhaps one shoudl write more often at 3 am...

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