Destiny.Fate Posted November 15, 2011 Share Posted November 15, 2011 Hi everyone！ This is my very first entry here so please pardon me for whatever that you will be seeing below... But first, i need to admit, that it wasn't exactly a poem. it was one of the lyrics that i wrote (in Chinese of course) and while i translate it to English, i sort of change it to how it is now. Holding On. Sadness could not be brought away by the monstrous waves How can you leave after knowing what I’ve became Never would I let you go and allow history to repeat Our love is real; we both understand the love was deep I do not wish to look at you leaving firmly While I grieve that you left me lonely Please turn and spare me your glance again For all I did was holding on to the pain You’re warm yet you’re cold You’ve dampened all the hopes of my soul When would you start believing That my love for you is unwavering Never would I let you go and allow history to repeat Our love is real; we both understand the love was deep I do not wish to look at you leaving firmly While I grieve that you left me lonely Please turn and spare me your glance again For all I did was holding on to the pain Looking at you as all my tears dries up What can I do to win back your heart I still love you and I always do I’m still dedicated always to you Please do not leave and stay with me I never ever let you go Never let you go Never would I let you go and allow history to repeat Our love is real; we both understand the love was deep I do not wish to look at you leaving firmly While I grieve that you left me lonely Please turn and spare me your glance again For all I did was holding on to the pain (I'm sorry for what I’ve done) I’m still holding on I’m not giving up (Please do not go and stay with me) How can I get you back Can i ever get your heart back =========================== For those who know Chinese, you can check out the original version below with additional parts. 滔天大海的巨浪 还是带不走悲伤 怎么能够 望着你走 当一切没发生过 (OS)说过的 做过的 难道你都不曾觉得该留恋吗 过去这段时间 我到底算什么 我不要再次放手让你离开我 不要历史再次的困扰我 我们的爱从没有虚假 让彼此掌握彼此的心 我不要看着你背影独自伤心 你却走的下定决心 回头看看我 我其实并不坚强 只会执著于你 翻云覆雨的等待 浇熄了所有期待 对你的心 永远不移 何时你才能相信 (OS)说过的 做过的 难道你都不曾觉得该留恋吗 过去这段时间 我到底算什么 我不要再次放手让你离开我 不要历史再次的困扰我 我们的爱 从没有虚假 让彼此掌握彼此的心 我不要看着你背影独自伤心 你却走的下定决心 回头看看 我其实并不坚强 我只会执著于你 [bridge] 当泪擦干以后 抬头看离去的你 我该怎么 怎么才能挽回你心 (OS)我还爱着你 对我还爱着你 不管你有没有爱过我 我依旧如此对你执著 不要离开 求你不要离开 我绝对不要放开你的手 绝对不会放开你的手 我不要再次放手让你离开我 不要历史再次的困扰我 我们的爱 从没有虚假 让彼此掌握彼此的心 我不要看着你背影独自伤心 你却走的下定决心 回头看看我 我其实并不坚强 只会执著于你 (对不起是我 一切都是因为我) 我依然执著 依然不想放弃 (请你不要走 不要离开我） 怎么才能挽回 (我到底应该怎么办 才挽回你的心 你的心) Thanks for reading! 11 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rei Posted November 15, 2011 Share Posted November 15, 2011 Wonderful poem/lyrics, just wonderful. So sensitive, sad and it is really making you feel the pain and sadness as you would live those moments now. Just beautiful, thanks for sharing it! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matti_19 Posted November 15, 2011 Share Posted November 15, 2011 Very beautiful! Too bad the poem is so sad.. But I agree with Rei, you're a very talented writer and everything you've written up to now was beautiful. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Destiny.Fate Posted November 15, 2011 Author Share Posted November 15, 2011 @Rei & Matti!! THANK YOU!! I'm really glad that i was able to convey what i wanted to say from the lyric/poem! And i'm glad that you accepted it! 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nena21 Posted November 15, 2011 Share Posted November 15, 2011 I am going to cry! So beautiful and so touchy! leaf4 Kisses dear and thank you for sharing! :* 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BRIDGET Posted November 16, 2011 Share Posted November 16, 2011 Sadness could not be brought away by the monstrous waves How can you leave after knowing what I’ve became My fav verses... Good composition, really deep feelings, right use of words to express those sad feelings. I think that the use of the chorus/refrain reinforces the idea of "fight" for that love the speaker wants to express, but it's just my humble impression. It's well written anyway... I liked it.... 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cherryyuri Posted November 21, 2011 Share Posted November 21, 2011 SO SO SO SO pretty!!!! i loved!!!! you're very talented! *-* 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Destiny.Fate Posted November 22, 2011 Author Share Posted November 22, 2011 I am going to cry! So beautiful and so touchy! leaf4 Kisses dear and thank you for sharing! :* @Nena - i hope you didn't cry... or i'll feel bad for making you feel that way... Thanks for liking! My fav verses... Good composition, really deep feelings, right use of words to express those sad feelings. I think that the use of the chorus/refrain reinforces the idea of "fight" for that love the speaker wants to express, but it's just my humble impression. It's well written anyway... I liked it.... @Bridget - Thanks for liking it! The feeling of not wanting that someone of yours to go, it has to be strong. so i hope to make it strong in order to convey the harshness. ahhh~ i hope i made it. SO SO SO SO pretty!!!! i loved!!!! you're very talented! *-* @cherryyuri - Thanks for liking it, and thanks for your compliment. I'm so glad! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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